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    Poetry Corner

    Welcome to the Poetry Corner

    A place where everyone can share their poems or if you are not inclined to write any poetry comment on the poems others have created. I'll start.

    Patrick Nelson

    Lost in a Dream

    Under the light of the crescent moon

    Crimson flowers begin their bloom

    As they arise upon the center of the dune

    The ground starts to quake and boom

    Until the earth transcends into space

    Where it moves with an uncertain haste

    Running along the celestial line as if in a race

    In its mist however it leaves not a trace of waste

    Until the hands of time give way

    And night turns to day


    Citadel

    Upon the citadel laid manís iron gaze

    Toward those that reign, those that imprison

    With fire and contempt the people set ablaze

    And so they had become newly arisen

    Throughout the night the crescent moon shone a vision

    Of newfound war that would plague the broken land

    What set forth after was a division

    Assembled thereafter a new command

    Of the winning parties iron clasped hand

    From which a new king climbed to the citadelís peak

    To seize control over his native land

    Under his rule his people grew meek

    The citadelís gaze ever reaching

    The people below always screeching

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    Good idea
    This is just something I quickly wrote the other night about me hating where I am

    Sunrise in Hell

    There's no hope from this broken home,
    "We're all in this together" they tell, together, but truly alone.
    The rain has been hitting us hard for days,
    Despite our anger, self doubt and praise.

    We all need this great escape,
    None of this fake dreams, superman and his cape.
    We'll find ourselves through this pain,
    What we've lost but what we have to gain.

    We've seen these friends come and go,
    Were they real friends or just for show?
    I've hit the hardest rock,
    But still never gave a fuck….

    We'll get through this they say,
    Whether it's true or false, this is MY way.
    Blue lights show our false reflection,
    Nothing but a show off complexion.

    One year down, a stepping stone,
    "We're all in this together" they tell, together but truly alone.
    I've hit the hardest rock,
    Slit wrists but never gave a fuck….

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    Presence

    Someone is behind your back

    Taking in all the hopes and dreams you lack

    And turning them all into the deepest black

    They will use that black to paint a plaque

    And will thereafter put it on a tire rack

    But that someone wonít leave a track

    To follow would lead thee to a shack

    Where they are waiting to make a surprise attack

    So it is best to get up and pack

    This person is no hack

    Someone is behind your back

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    Quote Originally Posted by ChrisValentine View Post
    Good idea
    This is just something I quickly wrote the other night about me hating where I am

    Sunrise in Hell

    There's no hope from this broken home,
    "We're all in this together" they tell, together, but truly alone.
    The rain has been hitting us hard for days,
    Despite our anger, self doubt and praise.

    We all need this great escape,
    None of this fake dreams, superman and his cape.
    We'll find ourselves through this pain,
    What we've lost but what we have to gain.

    We've seen these friends come and go,
    Were they real friends or just for show?
    I've hit the hardest rock,
    But still never gave a fuck….

    We'll get through this they say,
    Whether it's true or false, this is MY way.
    Blue lights show our false reflection,
    Nothing but a show off complexion.

    One year down, a stepping stone,
    "We're all in this together" they tell, together but truly alone.
    I've hit the hardest rock,
    Slit wrists but never gave a fuck….
    jesus chris..brighten up

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    Quote Originally Posted by djunglist View Post
    jesus chris..brighten up
    Haha, it's relevant. I can write poems about puppies and flowers if you want? :-p

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    For DJ

    Well let me begin,
    There was a puppy named Sin.
    He was a messy little shit,
    Always turning his dog home into a pit.

    There was a flower named Hope,
    Bright as day but all he did was mope.
    The sun was shining but he was always dim,
    Till the day Sin pissed on him.

    I hope this shows my true mood,
    The last line might be rude.
    Well DJ this is my view,
    If you don't like it... Fuck You


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    Over the Edge

    I didnít see the knife in your hand as it went into my back
    So do you think youíll see my foot stomp your head through the cracks
    You tried to play games and break my heart
    You canít break whatís been destroyed but I will tear you apart

    Say I wonít and youíll see me at my darkest
    As I laugh walking away from the buzzards eating at your carcass
    I need to see if I bleed to know Iím still living
    Though I see red, Iím already dead and I need to stop pretending

    I have been broken down physically and now have lost my mentality
    And you the world will bear witness to my brutality
    But remember me for who I was and not the monster you see
    This monster was created because they wouldnít let a wounded man be

    How can a heart beat thatís so frozen inside
    How can I stand here and let live when others need to die
    You donít need to be demented as me so Iíll not share my epiphany
    But Iíll let you know their screams together will be like a symphony

    I know not what I do and now I do what I must
    I have no feelings. No compassion, no love, and no trust
    My vengeance will be felt for a long time to come
    Maybe then I can rest in peace after my work here is done


    I Dream of Reality

    I often dream of reality. Of a touch I can see of a smell I can taste. I often dream of an awfully wonderful place. Does my dream aim to deceive me or lead and guide me to a place I need to be then leave me? In a place and time where visions of the mind become a sight for sore eyes I laugh as I cry then realize individually and collectively my thoughts have gathered in a state of irony. How does one hold onto an idea or let go of a piece of themselves? To be treated like an in demand product that sits on a shelf or even a poor sick man who has wealth from perfect health would be bitter sweet. To be the best of the worst or the worst of the best and still be happy is an open book test. For you see, life is an organized mess and structured chaos that fully completes nothing inside of us. If you submit to the courage to quit and become completely undone, you will be back for the first time for your last step is step one. Can you start tomorrow anew lightly today and be bold with yesterdays same ole same ole? Can you give what you take or do you run in place being real fake? To dig deep only to scratch the surface and realize a calm nervous form of mind can be a true lie. So when I dream of reality, I close my eyes to see that Iím going nowhere fast and my life is so far away standing before me.

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    Garbage Man
    Then I speak, I
    whisper
    Then I walk, I
    Sneak
    Money is in the bank,
    but who cares
    Death is inevitable
    Bloody
    Cold
    Transparent
    Done my duty
    But who cares

    Just a little something I made up. Poems doesn't have to rhyme.




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    Quote Originally Posted by gyrocop View Post
    Garbage Man
    Then I speak, I
    whisper
    Then I walk, I
    Sneak
    Money is in the bank,
    but who cares
    Death is inevitable
    Bloody
    Cold
    Transparent
    Done my duty
    But who cares

    Just a little something I made up. Poems doesn't have to rhyme.
    Thank you soo much.

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    Knight

    A hero rises in armor of steel

    And mounts his faithful steed

    With a mission and full of zeal

    He rides throughout the county with unmatched speed

    To vanquish a foe most foul

    In the darkness of the Abyss

    That has been hunting on the prowl

    Leaving its victims with but the sound of a hiss

    Down into the river valley our hero rides

    The populous wave and cheer on the stoic knight

    Whose future fate decides as his mount makes great strides

    He enters the place that may very well be his burial site

    A place where day turns to night

    A final test for this great knight

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    Looks like this thread hasn't been touched in quite some time...so I s'pose it's ready for some fresh work. By the way, I think the majority of the greatest poems do not rhyme. I think it's dependent on the point being made and how metaphors are used, if any at all. I use a mix of both; what may work best in a rhyming theme does not necessarily have the same effect with a non-rhyming poem. So, I guess it could be seen as Artistic Perspective.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Asatruar777 View Post
    Looks like this thread hasn't been touched in quite some time...so I s'pose it's ready for some fresh work. By the way, I think the majority of the greatest poems do not rhyme. I think it's dependent on the point being made and how metaphors are used, if any at all. I use a mix of both; what may work best in a rhyming theme does not necessarily have the same effect with a non-rhyming poem. So, I guess it could be seen as Artistic Perspective.
    Sounds great, show us some of your work, ill do it too.
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    Quote Originally Posted by BeefcakeJax View Post
    Sounds great, show us some of your work, ill do it too.
    Okay, well-I went through my written works yesterday; I'd originally intended to post at least one of them. However, these pieces are all still in their original state, unedited rough drafts from over the years. Always planned on getting around to that, but I'd continued creating as my mind kept coming up with new subject matter. So, here is one of the shorter ones, (non-rhyming) and so needed the least amount of editing. Criticism is not deterred, but unnecessary as everyone has their own ideas of what is "good" and what isn't. I was shot down by a "professional" once on a poetry website, because I "misspelled" things. Obviously the point in spelling certain words incorrectly was my own personal take and reinvention of the word to suit my personal feelings. I wouldn't think he'd miss that, but I suppose classic poetry is not the same as modern or abstract poetry.

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    My Artistic Style
    Creativity flows like a massive waterfall;
    Mind unlocks an arsenal of emotion
    Like hollowpoint slugs through your brain
    My deepest secrets spill out upon paper
    Metaphors left behind like bullet casings
    ***
    Mankind has such a lack of dignified qualities;
    The Herd-so loathsome and detestable
    Unimaginative, mundane, self-righteous masses
    Their collective heads buried in the sand
    Directionless followers of the Majority Rule
    Who then, is leading the flock?
    ***
    Existing within a realm of self-exploration
    Alone, cast down from the heavens
    Mocked & criticized for seeking Wisdom
    Abandoned I roam this earth in solitude
    In pursuit of truth hidden among the ashes;
    I attempt to maintain my own sanity
    Words, deifinitions, styles of speech & verse,
    Eclectic originality sets me free
    ***
    Never to conform or embrace Complacency
    I surpass false boundaries placed by Man
    Black is White is Grey;
    Shades of human limitation
    I am a vibrant rainbow,
    I paint my world as I see fit
    Clouds of Fate rain down upon my Soul,
    Showering me with sweet drops of Love
    ***
    Deified, I reign supreme over mankind
    Risen above the limited-thinkers
    Far beyond those walled in by rules & opinion
    Eternally residing outside the box
    You are My Creator;
    Yet now I am Your God

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    Who stole the cookies
    From the cookie jar?
    Everyone has
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    I really have a lot of stuff that is pretty vulgar and full of violence and fairly intense words that would guaranteed offend a great deal of people. All in all, this one wasn't the greatest, but of the things that wouldn't get me banned this was one of the few. I'm new here though, so I'm not entirely sure what is accepted, and what isn't. I know that "freedom of speech" is not something all people value, no matter how much they claim to appreciate & accept it. Especially with people forgetting that not everything should be taken as 100% truth, there are always going to be the foolhardy individuals who feel compelled to cry about things and "tell on you" if you happen to say something which either hurts their feelings, or may potentially hurt someone else's feelings. It's strange how in this world now, everybody is right; yet on a whole, everybody is wrong. Hypocrites are a dime a dozen though, and unfortunately has become a very accepted way of life (and often encouraged, it would seem).

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    Why haven't I seen this thread before? This thread is awesome!



    Half of my poetry is the lyrics of my songs
    that I write for singing or rapping which doesn't take long.
    Sometimes I would record a freestyle through the microphone
    and download it to my phone to listen outside of home.

    I start off with the music, I make it piece by piece
    and I plan out my nights before staying up to make these.
    You could call this a song already by the way I'm typing,
    but it's been a while since I've literally started writing.

    No it's not a rap, I won't bring up that crap
    Because I'm too tired to continue on, I'm gonna go take a nap.

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    ill put down a few short ones I guess.

    I see you in the shadows -
    Hiding from the world
    I am here beside you
    slipping
    into the fold.
    Sadly they’ve misjudged us
    Missed us in our plight
    And now we slip
    to far away
    To ever grab a hold.
    ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
    You’ve snared me in you trap
    A victim for your plaques
    Don me proudly
    on your wall
    But don’t forget me
    I see all.
    In your comfort
    you feel secure
    But in my eyes
    you don’t see
    The truth I hide inside of me.
    ----------------------------------------
    Drowning
    in your lies
    As I sink
    to my demise
    I see your face
    above the surface
    Calmly watching
    my last breath
    escape my lips
    and my eyes
    cloud up with death.
    -----------------------
    cold steel
    through my fingers
    silent screams
    fill my lungs
    shadows stalking
    through the night
    feeding hunger from my fright
    --------------------------------
    here I am
    all alone
    pushing my fingers
    down your throat
    make you breath
    make you scream
    make you seem just like me.

    sorry if its really long, I tried to put them beside each other but for some reason it wouldn't let me.

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